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Check My Grammar Mistakes Please!! It Is Very Urgent For Application. Thank You Guys!!!?

Statement of Interest
I believe I have taken on a new challenge by enrolling at Westminster University . It is my opinion that through this challenge I will gain new skills, skills that I will be able to put into practice in my private and my professional life. In order to be successful in life I will need to know what skills I have, what I am good at and what I need to focus on during this course. I intend to use all my skills from previous educational experiences in addition to this new one in the different field of law in which I wish to pursue a future career.
I am currently a junior law student at the Westminster University. In my Foundation studies course, I have taken classes in business, marketing, communications and public relations and received distinction in all of them. Eager to leverage my classroom learning into real world experience, I have also worked as a manager, later as a general manager for a small retail business. Later I was a participant in the exchange program, where I have worked in the USA for four months as a sales assistant, in “Secrets of Heaven Ltd”. My responsibilities at “Secrets of Heaven”, Inc included all the features of Customer service skills, from greeting customers and finding out their needs as well as recommending, describing and demonstrating use of the product, receiving and processing payments and providing change and receipts.
Now, one of my main ambitions for the close future is to get a scholarship to study for a Master’s degree in International law . Simply learning theory is not sufficient if I wish to enter my preferred University to obtain my degree. So, in order to get an excellent academic background as well as real-life experience, I wish to take an internship. Why in the British Council? I believe that a British Council internship will be by far the best choice as it will not only provide great experience but will also allow me to improve my language and communication skills. I am also optimistic that I will gain many other important career skills upon completion of this internship in its unique bicultural atmosphere.

No Responses to “Check My Grammar Mistakes Please!! It Is Very Urgent For Application. Thank You Guys!!!?”

  1. hollyblu says:

    I can’t see any grammar mistakes….
    🙂

  2. J. Glenn says:

    Through this exciting endeavor, I believe that I will gain new skills that will enable….. [made it a lot clearer and shorter, don’t repeat the word challenge]
    I need to know how to best use my skills, …. [don’t say you don’t know what skills you have]
    proficient at..[better than good at.]
    this “course of study” would sound more comprehensive.
    I believe that my solid educational background, including my studies in business and law, has prepared me to take on this new field of study, the direction I would actually love to pursue as my future professional career choice.
    ,
    Will you end with something like… Thank you so much for your consideration of my internship with you. ?
    The rest looks great to me, I wouldn’t change a thing in the last two paragraphs. Hope I was a help.
    Good Luck! –Dan

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