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I’m a 14 year old aspiring artist and this is my first verse of a song called FTW, and I wanted opinions before i post a full song and video, you might get some parts mixed up because i use alot of metaphors but here it is:
1rst v: Im a good kid, that lives in a mad world for a young *****
But its cool cause when i make it everyone gon be on bandwagon, more recognition i cant imagine
But it’s a cold city here, Chi-town has no pity or sympathy here
Cause this life im living, its not the life for me
So Im gonna do whatever that’s right for me
Forget my doubters, Im gonna be what I’d like to be
I been through lots of horrible things you cant frighten me, enlighten me
Dear Lord, have mercy on my enemies
Thank you for the great lyrical talent that you’ve given me
Im tired of the music industry, comparing me to wack wanna be pop stars, man are u kidding me?
Im not your average rapper, i got poetic flow
Every song i make has a message in a song
I need to find my niche somewhere, some place where i belong
But I gotta get out this city, its so lonely and cold.
Forget the world Its just me myself and my team
We dont care what other’s say we just share the same dream
Get rich and famous and buy frivolous things, that we dont need
Like Wiz Were living young-wild-and-free

I’m a 14 year old aspiring artist and this is my first verse of a song called FTW, and I wanted opinions before i post a full song and video, you might get some parts mixed up because i use alot of metaphors but here it is:
1rst v: Im a good kid, that lives in a mad world for a young *****
But its cool cause when i make it everyone gon be on bandwagon, more recognition i cant imagine
But it’s a cold city here, Chi-town has no pity or sympathy here
Cause this life im living, its not the life for me
So Im gonna do whatever that’s right for me
Forget my doubters, Im gonna be what I’d like to be
I been through lots of horrible things you cant frighten me, enlighten me
Dear Lord, have mercy on my enemies
Thank you for the great lyrical talent that you’ve given me
Im tired of the music industry, comparing me to wack wanna be pop stars, man are u kidding me?
Im not your average rapper, i got poetic flow
Every song i make has a message in a song
I need to find my niche somewhere, some place where i belong
But I gotta get out this city, its so lonely and cold.
Forget the world Its just me myself and my team
We dont care what other’s say we just share the same dream
Get rich and famous and buy frivolous things, that we dont need
Like Wiz Were living young-wild-and-free

I’ve tried out a few of the home online business things and have only been marjinally successful with one, but then they never paid me. Does Anyone have A GOOD and HONEST affiliate marketting site that works?