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Hi,
I am doing my essay and it is difficult for me because I am not a native English speaker. Please, help me checking my text, thanks:
“The non-fulfillment of rules represents a big problem to DMTU, which is pressured by operator enterprises for increasing the quantity of vehicles on routes. The purpose of these is “to better the business” (major number of affiliated units”. Some of the consequences for the bad services are the following:
– Permanent maltreatment to the public transportation passenger by providing a deficient service.
– Users of public transportation are waiting for a soon change in the service.
– The dominant situation in the transportation market has caused the disintegration of the real enterprises.
– Current operator enterprises have as a unique objective to obtain “the maximum number of affiliated units”. The quality of the service is displaced to a second or third level of priority.”
Anne

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  1. Stormy Cloud says:

    Not completely sure what you r trying to write here
    but I suggest these changes *at least*
    -in “The purpose of these is “to better the business” … change these to this
    -put a closed parenthesis after units
    and in “which is pressured by operator enterprises for increasing the quantity”… do you mean pressured by operating enterprises TO increase the quantity?

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